MHSGuard
11-11-2006, 01:42 PM
I am a huge fan of Poetry and i am also a fan of poetry critsism. The following poem I wrote for a poetry book my freshman year of highschool so please tell me what you think about it.
What is it that makes us want to live to see tommorrow...
...A mothers love
...A small white dove
...A fathers embrace
...A strand of beutiful lace
...The rising of the sun
...A way to say you were the only one
...Another day of trouble
...Another small struggle
...Someone who cares
...A friend who shares
...What you have not done
...What you have not lost or won
...Somewhere to go
...Something to show
...God's creation
...Freedom in this nation
...A book to read
...Something in which you succeed
...A poem to write
...A bulb to light
...Something new to learn
...A boat ride on the stern
What is it that makes us want to live to see tommorrow...
...A mothers love
...A small white dove
...A fathers embrace
...A strand of beutiful lace
...The rising of the sun
...A way to say you were the only one
...Another day of trouble
...Another small struggle
...Someone who cares
...A friend who shares
...What you have not done
...What you have not lost or won
...Somewhere to go
...Something to show
...God's creation
...Freedom in this nation
...A book to read
...Something in which you succeed
...A poem to write
...A bulb to light
...Something new to learn
...A boat ride on the stern